Tears of Fury

[Miroku]

starting a new anime will be down and it might be long so i'll be taking brakes and in the brake you can tell how you like it and what you don't understand. The anime name is Tears of Fury.
so let it start. #jumpy7ay#

[Miroku]

I know this is braking a rule but i need to start the tread

Tears of Fury Chapter one:
In the planet X in the Naturanian solar system a brith was starting as the women gave brith she said "I shall name her Chi." Shortly after she died leaving the father Sako with the new born. At the same time the planet was being destroyed in front of Sako's eyes he ran as the planet was going to exploded... he made it in time so they waited for years planet to planet until they came to Earth "We are here for 1 thousand years we made it Chi." said Sako. "It is beautiful but why this planet dad?" said Chi. "You are finaly here Sako now I can finish my mission and kill off the two last Naturcons. In case you don't know I am Sheveze the demon that destroyed the planet X and now your turn." " You monster." Chi sceamed. End of chapter

[The Big Daddy C-Master]

You don't need to put the end of chapter, it makes it look less polished. What's the main plot? Or central idea?

[Miroku]

I'm getting to it

Chapter 2:
"You Naturcons thinks your so strong well I proved you guys wrong by killing the whole raise except you two and you fell right on my lap." Said Sheveze. Sako charge to the demon and the fight to revenge the lost of a great raise. Punch after punch, kick after kick,power after power. Chi watch as her father fought and seems to her that his is winning. Until an star just blew up and the shock wave was coming for Earth. Sako went to the end of the atmosphere and tried to stop the wave."... Daddy stop you will die please don't do it!" Chi said. Sako flew toward the ground unable to recover himself and died. Chi stood there angry as what happen so she came after Sheveze and sent him back to hell. Chi was beat up by the fight. "..! Hey what is the date of this planet?" Chi asked a human child "It is October 9, 8029. What are you stupid?" asked the little boy. " No I'm an alien." "Well for an alien your cute. What are you doing in Tokyo, Japan? Chi explained what happen and the little boy said. " My name is Howix." Howix help Chi to get Sako back to life. They went off in space taking years to find the Soul planet. "Wow it is my 26 birthday I can't believe that it toke 18 years to find it but we are here. " Said Howix

[The Big Daddy C-Master]

miroku said:

I'm getting to it

Chapter 2:
"You Naturcons thinks your so strong well I proved you guys wrong by killing the whole raise except you two and you fell right on my lap." Said Sheveze. Sako charge to the demon and the fight to revenge the lost of a great raise. Punch after punch, kick after kick,power after power. Chi watch as her father fought and seems to her that his is winning. Until an star just blew up and the shock wave was coming for Earth. Sako went to the end of the atmosphere and tried to stop the wave."... Daddy stop you will die please don't do it!" Chi said. Sako flew toward the ground unable to recover himself and died. Chi stood there angry as what happen so she came after Sheveze and sent him back to hell. Chi was beat up by the fight. "..! Hey what is the date of this planet?" Chi asked a human child "It is October 9, 8029. What are you stupid?" asked the little boy. " No I'm an alien." "Well for an alien your cute. What are you doing in Tokyo, Japan? Chi explained what happen and the little boy said. " My name is Howix." Howix help Chi to get Sako back to life. They went off in space taking years to find the Soul planet. "Wow it is my 26 birthday I can't believe that it toke 18 years to find it but we are here. " Said Howix

This one is better than the first chapter and helped immersify me into the story much deeper.

[Miroku]

Chapter Three:
"So let me get this right you do't have to eat ever but your not skinny. Also you can live up tp 1 Billion years old and don't look like a age over your 20s....Wow that is very cool." said Howix "Now my trun you have to eat about 3 or 4 times a day you live up tp your 80s or 90s your skin looks like a purn at that time thats old is a babies age in our time. You can't live without water and this so called food....Like you said wow that is very... weird. But your cute even for an age for a new born." replied Chi. It has been an hour when they land and went to look for the Stone of One Thousand Souls. " I found it let see." The stone said Whom leave must bring a replacement to the world and whom leaves must leave at once if loved by ones heart. " What do that means." asked Chi. "We must give a soul to get a soul back... then we must leave when it is done." said Howix with a sad face. Chi step in front of the stones face and said to bring Sako back. When the stone was about to switch the two souls a tear fell from Chi's face and said to Howix 'i love you Howix and I'll never forget you." With rage Howix saw a little bird and threw it infront of Chi with his mighty fury and a big flash blind Howix. Howix saw a body it was the body of Sako and see that he just woke up he waited until he can see the whole temple and saw another body It blonged to Chi and saw that she was breathing and was happy with joy and a single tear from his face. The three left the planet and retrun to Earth and share eath other stories and had some time to relaxed well for a bit until a big bang was next to the town.

[The Big Daddy C-Master]

miroku said:

Chapter Three:
"So let me get this right you do't have to eat ever but your not skinny. Also you can live up tp 1 Billion years old and don't look like a age over your 20s....Wow that is very cool." said Howix "Now my trun you have to eat about 3 or 4 times a day you live up tp your 80s or 90s your skin looks like a purn at that time thats old is a babies age in our time. You can't live without water and this so called food....Like you said wow that is very... weird. But your cute even for an age for a new born." replied Chi. It has been an hour when they land and went to look for the Stone of One Thousand Souls. " I found it let see." The stone said Whom leave must bring a replacement to the world and whom leaves must leave at once if loved by ones heart. " What do that means." asked Chi. "We must give a soul to get a soul back... then we must leave when it is done." said Howix with a sad face. Chi step in front of the stones face and said to bring Sako back. When the stone was about to switch the two souls a tear fell from Chi's face and said to Howix 'i love you Howix and I'll never forget you." With rage Howix saw a little bird and threw it infront of Chi with his mighty fury and a big flash blind Howix. Howix saw a body it was the body of Sako and see that he just woke up he waited until he can see the whole temple and saw another body It blonged to Chi and saw that she was breathing and was happy with joy and a single tear from his face. The three left the planet and retrun to Earth and share eath other stories and had some time to relaxed well for a bit until a big bang was next to the town.

Good, good, keep em comin!

[Miroku]

Chapter Four:

"What was that?!" yelled Chi. " Lets go check it out " answered Sako. As they ran to the town they saw who was the cause of it. "Sheveze? What the heck are you doing here? I thought I send you back to hell? " Yes but I not here alone here is my big brother Vega and Cage as you can see they are twins and way more stronger than I." "That may be but you have not seen our true power and that I was toying with you the whole time." said Sako. "Chi who are they and why do you know them?" said Howix " They are very strong demons I fought them beefore I met you and-" A big bag came under Chi's foot and the fight had begin. As Sako trys to keep the powers within a stay inside and it finally came out. "Fire!" Sako screamed and fire came out off his hand and of the looks of it he was in control and started the Naturcon's power than he release a wind, earth, water and thunder attack and put the three demons a shame .


Find out what happen in part 2 of chapter three.

[The Big Daddy C-Master]

miroku said:

Chapter Four:

"What was that?!" yelled Chi. " Lets go check it out " answered Sako. As they ran to the town they saw who was the cause of it. "Sheveze? What the heck are you doing here? I thought I send you back to hell? " Yes but I not here alone here is my big brother Vega and Cage as you can see they are twins and way more stronger than I." "That may be but you have not seen our true power and that I was toying with you the whole time." said Sako. "Chi who are they and why do you know them?" said Howix " They are very strong demons I fought them beefore I met you and-" A big bag came under Chi's foot and the fight had begin. As Sako trys to keep the powers within a stay inside and it finally came out. "Fire!" Sako screamed and fire came out off his hand and of the looks of it he was in control and started the Naturcon's power than he release a wind, earth, water and thunder attack and put the three demons a shame .


Find out what happen in part 2 of chapter three.

I'll be waiting...

[Miroku]

Chapter 3 part two
"Chi I didn't know you guys can do that wow that is amazing." said Howix while they fight. Every thing was going good something was happen to Howix whom was fighting with all his might and was being beat. "arrrrrrrhhhhhhhh somethings wrong it hurts too much whats going on." Howix was going through trasformation and doing it way too fast and Sako looks like he knew what was going to happen the whole time. " I knew it he was him he was Heliumto and he truning into him the king of our raise. The master of all earth, wind, fire, water, and thunder he is fianally here." said Sako. "What do you mean why him what is happening to Howix." asked Chi.

[The Big Daddy C-Master]

miroku said:

Chapter 3 part two
"Chi I didn't know you guys can do that wow that is amazing." said Howix while they fight. Every thing was going good something was happen to Howix whom was fighting with all his might and was being beat. "arrrrrrrhhhhhhhh somethings wrong it hurts too much whats going on." Howix was going through trasformation and doing it way too fast and Sako looks like he knew what was going to happen the whole time. " I knew it he was him he was Heliumto and he truning into him the king of our raise. The master of all earth, wind, fire, water, and thunder he is fianally here." said Sako. "What do you mean why him what is happening to Howix." asked Chi.

Good work.

[Miroku]

if you guys was paying attention you see that i put capter three part 2 when i meant to put chapter 4.

Capter Five:
"Look Cage look at the freak he is dieing." said Vega while laughing. A big flash came out of Howix and all you can hear is punches being thrown and kick and blast. The very bright light went away and Sako and Chi saw the king of Naturcons had came to thier time of need. "Where is Howix? What have you done to him answer me you b***h, wha-" "Chi stop that is still Howix but in the Naturcon form and he look back to normal in a few days...What are we going to do with this retards?" said Sako " Let them let this be a waring don' mess with Earth." said Howix. The three demons ran to get strong and left without a trail. "Chi look at the sky isn't it beautiful... I mean not as beautiful as you." said Howix looking at the night sky. One year later... "Chi...will you merry me." said Howix as he neil down.

Will Chi say yes, will the three demons ever return and is Howix half Naturcon find out next time in Chapter Five part two.

[The Big Daddy C-Master]

miroku said:

if you guys was paying attention you see that i put capter three part 2 when i meant to put chapter 4.

Capter Five:
"Look Cage look at the freak he is dieing." said Vega while laughing. A big flash came out of Howix and all you can hear is punches being thrown and kick and blast. The very bright light went away and Sako and Chi saw the king of Naturcons had came to thier time of need. "Where is Howix? What have you done to him answer me you b***h, wha-" "Chi stop that is still Howix but in the Naturcon form and he look back to normal in a few days...What are we going to do with this retards?" said Sako " Let them let this be a waring don' mess with Earth." said Howix. The three demons ran to get strong and left without a trail. "Chi look at the sky isn't it beautiful... I mean not as beautiful as you." said Howix looking at the night sky. One year later... "Chi...will you merry me." said Howix as he neil down.

Will Chi say yes, will the three demons ever return and is Howix half Naturcon find out next time in Chapter Five part two.

Very deep chapter...

[Miroku]

I think you guys waited to long here it is
Chapter five part two:

" I... I don't know what to say Howix... I do want to be with you but... I' am not ready for this ..sorry." Chi left with a tear and a smile leaving Howix with lot of qusetions. The next day. "Look when will attack from thier weak point the beautiful Chi she seem that she can be fouled easily." said Cage talking to his brothers. Meanwhile... "Wow what is that smell so good what is this stuff..oh I remmber it is food Howix told me about it he said that it taste good what ever that means. Can I get some please? Sako said to the free sample girl. "Yes you can." she replied. Sako tasted the food. " wow this is great...what is this called?" said Sako "chacolate don't you know that? what planet are you from?." the girl said "Planet X from the Naturaian solar system." answered Sako. The girl chuckled "Your funny and cute do you want togo on a date? Oh by the way my name is Onix a weird name but it is a cool jem." "My name is Sako and yes I'll like to if theres chacolate wow this is cool i want to eat more food...food is great." "Get me at HamTango at 8 see you later." Onix lend in for a kiss and miss his check and got Sako's lips. Onix and Sako was at a blush they couldn't even talk." Well see you later.

find out what happens in Chapter six got to go bye

[The Big Daddy C-Master]

*Waits*

[Psyquis52]

Wow! #clapping4hq# Keep going!

[The Big Daddy C-Master]

miroku said:

ok I wanted to do this yestreday but my computer was down so here we go
Chapter Six:
"Wow I love this planet i have chacolate, a date with Onix, and I have this funny feeling in my tummy. *ouch* I have to ask Howix what is the meaning of this...

This is chapter six?

[Miroku]

Well I wrote a lot but I think somthing happen to my computer well just egnore the very short one and I have to tell all you guys something. My story is going to have bad languge and have some signs to tellyou some meaning like if I put () and put some one talking in the middle that all in their mind and if you see * its like the noise that the thing or person is making ok and in every end of the six chapter I will have some secerts about Tears of Fury and whats behind the person how I made them up and all other things so next time I log back in I'll start Chapter six

[The Big Daddy C-Master]

miroku said:

Well I wrote a lot but I think somthing happen to my computer well just egnore the very short one and I have to tell all you guys something. My story is going to have bad languge and have some signs to tellyou some meaning like if I put () and put some one talking in the middle that all in their mind and if you see * its like the noise that the thing or person is making ok and in every end of the six chapter I will have some secerts about Tears of Fury and whats behind the person how I made them up and all other things so next time I log back in I'll start Chapter six

Oh ok...

[Miroku]

Chapter six:

"(Iam not ready to be merried...sorry.) I seems like it was not her but at Soul (I love you Howix.) I hope that it was true. Is it because of Heilumto is inside of me and she didnt want to merry a differant man. But I'am still me just gotin stronger." said Howix to himself while looking out while the sun sets. Meanwhile at the foodcourt... "A kiss and I..we fell for each other...Onix the most beautiful girl in Earth... I wonder I should tell her that I have a daughter? (What you have a daughter and lie to me you basterd) wow I could see it now all ready...huh? Is that-no it can't be but she had died long ago...Chi-....(It is her) Chinitte!" Sako said runing to the girl and huged her. "Sako how long I yern for you to hold me up to your body once again...." "I thought you died at the-" "Yes I did but I hve came back... I came back to see you *sniff...cry soob*." "Chinitte who did this tell me now who is the one that took your soul out of rest!?" " A angel three of them named Cage, Vega, and Sheveze." Sako look like his heart has just been riped out.

Who is this girl that Sako loved long ago and why did the three demons bring her back to life find out in Chapter six part two

[Sango]

Cool this is a very cool manga I hope it comes out as a cartoon I will wacth it everytime

[Miroku]

I wont leave you sango I love you...ok all jokes aside

You guy are wondering who is this girl and how do sako know her well I can't tell you until it revealed but there is some stuff i tell you Sako name was Tege but I wanted it to sound japanese so his name became Tegeagua but it sound alright at the time but some how I came with Sako.
Chi was going to be a boy. Todge was her..his name but i wanted it to be more Dama so bye Todge and Hello Chi ...got to go and thats it from behind the cartoons

[The Big Daddy C-Master]

sango said:

Cool this is a very cool manga I hope it comes out as a cartoon I will wacth it everytime

We have a Sango now... Cool!

Let me reduce your sig a lil hun, it's too big.

[The Big Daddy C-Master]

miroku said:

I wont leave you sango I love you...ok all jokes aside

You guy are wondering who is this girl and how do sako know her well I can't tell you until it revealed but there is some stuff i tell you Sako name was Tege but I wanted it to sound japanese so his name became Tegeagua but it sound alright at the time but some how I came with Sako.
Chi was going to be a boy. Todge was her..his name but i wanted it to be more Dama so bye Todge and Hello Chi ...got to go and thats it from behind the cartoons

Lol you guys are wierd...

[Miroku]

Ok
Chapter Six part two:
"Chinitte you can't trust those men they are nothing but evil...although I love you." said Sako "I don't have long. But come with me Sako. Come with me to the spirit world to live forever... *kiss*." Sako was frozing he could not move at all. I t was like he was asleep. Chinitte started to bring him to the spirit world. Chi just saw Sako getting pull to the spirit world. "Dad who is this what going on here?" said Chi. Chinitte saw Chi and stop what she was doing. My...My Child how I lon for to see you..It is I your mother." "No it can't be your died you are nothing but ash...you died when I was born and the world was soon blown up after words. It is impossable." said Chi confused. Chinitte huged Chi "I will bring Sako and you to the spirit world for we life like a family." she started to bring them both down till Howix came down and choped Chinitte in half." Howix you bitch you killed my wife the one I love" said Sako. "That was not your wife look." A girl demon was in a body case to make her seem like Sako's wife. "You spoiled my plain human and now I will kill you once in for all" said Vega.


Wait for part three to see what happens next.

[The Big Daddy C-Master]

miroku said:

Ok
Chapter Six part two:
"Chinitte you can't trust those men they are nothing but evil...although I love you." said Sako "I don't have long. But come with me Sako. Come with me to the spirit world to live forever... *kiss*." Sako was frozing he could not move at all. I t was like he was asleep. Chinitte started to bring him to the spirit world. Chi just saw Sako getting pull to the spirit world. "Dad who is this what going on here?" said Chi. Chinitte saw Chi and stop what she was doing. My...My Child how I lon for to see you..It is I your mother." "No it can't be your died you are nothing but ash...you died when I was born and the world was soon blown up after words. It is impossable." said Chi confused. Chinitte huged Chi "I will bring Sako and you to the spirit world for we life like a family." she started to bring them both down till Howix came down and choped Chinitte in half." Howix you bitch you killed my wife the one I love" said Sako. "That was not your wife look." A girl demon was in a body case to make her seem like Sako's wife. "You spoiled my plain human and now I will kill you once in for all" said Vega.


Wait for part three to see what happens next.

Do you know how to properly indent your dailogue?

[Miroku]

no and I don't want to learn how

[Sango]

*Sniff* that was sad

[The Big Daddy C-Master]

miroku said:

no and I don't want to learn how

Aw... the ladies love a man who indents his dialogue...

[Miroku]

you bet I do.............Hey My friends said that they want to be in here so I will help them. They said that on wants to be inuyasha and the other Kagome wont that be cool? #jumpy7ay#